Advice On My Advert Going In A Magazine??

Business By YummyChoo Updated 12 May 2010 , 2:34pm by YummyChoo

YummyChoo Posted 12 May 2010 , 8:54am
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Need some advice on this? how does it sound?? has to be 50 words

Yummy Choo creates fabulous cupcakes & cakes, which are lovingly
homemade & individually hand decorated!
Based in Croydon, Surrey we cater for any special occasion or event &
each order can be customised to your liking. We are highly recommended
and competitve on prices.
Check out www.yummychoo.co.uk

13 replies
Jo-melia Posted 12 May 2010 , 9:27am
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Sounds good to me!
I'm wondering if which should be that?
And, to be picky, maybe put a comma after Surrey?

YummyChoo Posted 12 May 2010 , 9:43am
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hm maybe get rid of the which are ?

cakemom42 Posted 12 May 2010 , 9:56am
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Try this:

Fabulous Yummy Choo cupcakes lovingly homemade & individually hand decorated! Join us in Croydon, Surrey where we cater to your special occasion/event. You'll love our customised orders.
Highly recommended and competitve prices, come check us out!
www.yummychoo.co.uk

YummyChoo Posted 12 May 2010 , 10:54am
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thats sounds really good! I am a home baker so where it is the join us or come check us out, should i just say Based in Croydon... or check out our website.. wat u think?

cakemom42 Posted 12 May 2010 , 11:49am
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Here you go :0)

Fabulous Yummy Choo cupcakes lovingly homemade & individually hand decorated! Call for your appointment today in Croydon, Surrey where catering to your special occasion/event is our delight. You'll love our customised orders. Highly recommended and competitve prices, check us out at www.yummychoo.co.uk !

YummyChoo Posted 12 May 2010 , 1:29pm
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thats cake mom that sounds perfect. Which picture do you think is the best out of these below???? to go with the wording for the magazine.
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cakemom42 Posted 12 May 2010 , 1:40pm
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You are most welcome!
I like number 2 best.
But number 1 works too :0)

Good Luck!

cakesbymark Posted 12 May 2010 , 1:40pm
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i like the first pic

Jenn2179 Posted 12 May 2010 , 1:43pm
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I like #1 best.

CWR41 Posted 12 May 2010 , 1:54pm
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I like #3.

SecretAgentCakeBaker Posted 12 May 2010 , 2:10pm
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What kind of magazine is it? If it is a wedding magazine, then definitely picture number one works best. Number two looks great for any kind of general ad.

cerasmiles Posted 12 May 2010 , 2:31pm
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# 1 looks great!!

YummyChoo Posted 12 May 2010 , 2:34pm
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thanks guys! Ive submitted the 1st picture!

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