I Need Your Input! Will You Proof My New Order Form?

Decorating By Dreme Updated 17 Apr 2010 , 6:13am by CWR41

Dreme Posted 15 Apr 2010 , 12:32am
post #1 of 16

I'm in the process of adding an order form to my website. I'm just ready to get this thing going. I'm still trying to work out the kinks so if you see anything wrong let me know. You do not have to fill in to form if you don't want to. I just need to know the ease of filling it out. How it flows and such. Any submission will be solely for the purpose of testing. The your notes box at the bottom can be used for problems or notes about the page.

I just free typed everything on the page. I reread it but I'm just getting frustrated with how I want things to be said. If something there doesn't make sense let me know.

Here's the link to the form:

http://www.dremecakeartistry.com/how-to-order/

Thank you so soooo much for helping me! Your input is greatly appreciated!

15 replies
tmac670 Posted 15 Apr 2010 , 1:00am
post #2 of 16

Your website is amazing, as is your work. The order form looks good to me.

Occther Posted 15 Apr 2010 , 1:24am
post #3 of 16

You misspelled "receive" in "30-89 Days before you event date will recieve 50% Refund"

Ursula40 Posted 15 Apr 2010 , 1:48am
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Another mistake
completly as possible, completely as possible

Number Of Guest Expected (better use plural i.e guests)
prefered is spelt with double "r" i.e. preferred
check all the receives, you mispelt at least two, but other than that, great form

cakegrandma Posted 15 Apr 2010 , 1:53am
post #5 of 16

She spelled receive correctly, the rule is "i" before "e" except after c, so it is correct. I should say the place I saw receive. I think your site is great and the order part is easy to navigate.
evelyn

Occther Posted 15 Apr 2010 , 2:02am
post #6 of 16

First line under "Wedding & Large Orders" was correct - second wasn't.

zdebssweetsj Posted 15 Apr 2010 , 2:10am
post #7 of 16

WOW, looks great. My only concern was for wedding cakes and large cakes it looks like they have to pay the total two weeks before the event? Seems kinda close to the event to me. Maybe I misread your ordering section. Your pictures are awesome, good luck, I'm sure you'll do wonderfully.

TejasRebel Posted 15 Apr 2010 , 2:37am
post #8 of 16

"Orders are taken on a first to commit, first processed basis."

"For credit and debit card payments, you will be emailed..."

"Cash drop-offs must be arranged..."

Suggested: "All orders must be paid in full two weeks before your event date."

"...deliver your items successfully. However, I cannot be responsible..."

"...finalized upon receipt of payment."

"...I cannot guarantee any changes."

30-89 Days before your event date will receive.

Please don't think I'm nitpicking on you. This is what I do for a living icon_smile.gif

TejasRebel Posted 15 Apr 2010 , 2:39am
post #9 of 16

And by the way, your site looks GREAT!

tesso Posted 15 Apr 2010 , 2:59am
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i like your page. nice job.

yours: (All orders must be fully paid by two weeks of your event

I would change this to: All orders must be paid in full two weeks prior to event.

I think it just flows a little easier. IMO. icon_smile.gif

edited to add: I noticed the word "your" alot. example: I will email or call you within 48hrs to verify your information.

It is not needed, and will save on read time, plus add clarification, and make some sentences flow better. I will email or call within 48 hrs to verify that all information is correct.

the first thing i learned in my professional writing classes is to eliminate all "you & yours" when not absolutely needed. Am I giving away how many business reports I have had to write? icon_lol.gif

CWR41 Posted 15 Apr 2010 , 3:12am
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If you need to make an order or have questions
If you need to make an order, or have questions,

please use the contact me form.
please use the "contact me" form.

Sorry for the inconvience
Sorry for the inconvenience

please fill form
please fill out form

Single Tier Celebration Cake
Single-Tier Celebration Cake

48hrs
48 hrs or 48 hours

first- to-commit-first-processed basis.
first-to-commit, first-processed basis.

If the day you are requesting is booked, (I'd use...)
If the date you are requesting is booked, (just so you aren't using "day" twice in the same sentence.)

casme Posted 15 Apr 2010 , 3:56am
post #12 of 16

on the side with order information you have the word once written twice.

ccr03 Posted 15 Apr 2010 , 5:12pm
post #13 of 16

I love the side w/info! I'm copying/rewording/using the same format for my site.

cylstrial Posted 16 Apr 2010 , 2:02pm
post #14 of 16

You are very talented! Gorgeous cakes. I filled out your order form and it was super easy to fill out. Anyone should be able to do it!

Dreme Posted 16 Apr 2010 , 10:44pm
post #15 of 16

Thank you guys! You have been a big help. All changes have been made. The page is about ready to be put up. The link has been disabled until it goes up.

CWR41 Posted 17 Apr 2010 , 6:13am
post #16 of 16

One more change you might want to make on your next update:

If the date requested is booked, orders may be able for pick-up...

(You may have intended to sayicon_smile.gif
If the date requested is booked, orders may be available for pick-up...

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