Help Needed For Thankyou Poem/verse

Lounge By Inspired84 Updated 14 Aug 2009 , 2:10pm by Elise87

Inspired84 Posted 13 Aug 2009 , 1:57am
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Hi Everyone.
I desperatley need help i have been racking my brain and cant word this!

My daughter is getting baptised next weekend, and i have ordered "thankyou candles" for the guests and Godparents which have been done but i want to do an indivdual candle for my aunty her who my daughter the her bastipm gown, and i want to put a personal message on the candle just for her that says thank you and how "special" etc it is.
Do it will start

Dear Aunty Evelyn
(insert verse)
Love Maddison Grace (My daughter)

I have been thinking about it constantly and cant come up with anything i really want o make it personal, the lady making the candle (who has done a fantastic job with all the candles) was just going to put thank you for this momento that has made my day to specail - but i feel this is to impersonal - i really want the mention of her giving the gown and how generous it was etc.

I have to send her somethine by this afternoon - so PLEASE HELP IF YOU CAN - i would be so appreiacte it/anything.

TIA
Nicole

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Elise87 Posted 13 Aug 2009 , 3:15am
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eh i am so bad at this but here is SOMETHING lol

Dear Aunty Evelyn

For your generous gift
on my baptism day
what a special thought
A sincere thank-you i want to say

Love Maddison Grace


Sorry that's all i can think up and yes sorry it rhythms if that's not what you were looking for lol

HTH in any way icon_smile.gif

Inspired84 Posted 13 Aug 2009 , 8:14am
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That is sounding great - THANKYOU!

I have changed a little to

A sincere thankyou i want to say
For your generous gift
on my baptism day

Then i wanted to have a couple of lines actually mentioning the gown (really like the rhyming)
Any suggestions how we could incoprate it? Def want to keep those first 3 lines though

TIA
Nicole

Elise87 Posted 13 Aug 2009 , 8:40am
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that sounds so much better and makes more sense lol I kinna wrote it backwards lol

I'm so sorry i have been racking my brain for some more lines with the gown included and this is all that i can come up it.....my brain has stopped working lol

A sincere thankyou i want to say
For your generous gift
on my baptism day

A beautiful gown
which i will hold dear
to look back on in the future
not only now and here

.....I had a bit of a problem with the last 2 lines to rhythm

Inspired84 Posted 14 Aug 2009 , 1:29am
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OMG THAT ITS PERFECT!!
Thank you so much!!!!
You are fantastic!!!
It is exactly what i was thinking of~!
THANKYOU!!
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Elise87 Posted 14 Aug 2009 , 1:37am
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that's alright, glad I could help icon_smile.gif

Inspired84 Posted 14 Aug 2009 , 1:42am
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OKay i am going to be a HUGE pain in the bottom!
Can you think of one more verse? Dont have anything that i wanna say but i feel it needs one more to finish it off! (so annoying i used to be so good at this kinda thing at school and now my head is just blank).
When i get the candles i will post a pic to show you what a wonderful job you have done!
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Inspired84 Posted 14 Aug 2009 , 1:45am
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The candle it quite tall..so i think that 3 verses will look more "even" on the layout if that makes sense??
But what you have already come up with is so great! I cant thank you enough!
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Elise87 Posted 14 Aug 2009 , 1:59am
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oh nooooooo lol Give me a sec lol..........

Elise87 Posted 14 Aug 2009 , 2:01am
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do you want to mention the candle as a gift in the next verse? Or not really

Elise87 Posted 14 Aug 2009 , 2:18am
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Ok so this is all i got again lol But not sure if it cuts off too quickly?

A sincere thankyou i want to say
For your generous gift
on my baptism day

A beautiful gown
which i will hold dear
to look back on in the future
not only now and here

So this is my gift i give to you
for your lovely thoughts
and your kindness too
(or.....and your kindness you show too)

Inspired84 Posted 14 Aug 2009 , 2:21am
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Haha sorry! but THANKS!
Umm i dont really mind to tell the truth! i'll give you full creative license! haha
Just something to "finish" if off you you know what i mean.



Just saw your last bit!
Sounds great...but i think your right about it cutting of too quickly,,when i read it it feels like theres more to follow if you know what i mean?

Elise87 Posted 14 Aug 2009 , 2:24am
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yeh that's what i thought, it sounds sorta like there should be another line or another verse or soemthing afterwards

....and the kindsness you have shown too?

ahhhh i dunno, i am stumped on this one, i used up all my brain cells on the last 2 verses lol

Inspired84 Posted 14 Aug 2009 , 2:31am
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A sincere thankyou i want to say
For your generous gift
on my baptism day

A beautiful gown
which i will hold dear
to look back on in the future
not only now and here

So this is my gift i give to you
for your lovely thoughts
and your kindness too

Think tat sounds so bloody fantastic!
i'm trying to think of a line to "close" it off too..I think my brains fried when i had my kids! lol
Thank u so much for all your help and brain power i really appreicte it!

Inspired84 Posted 14 Aug 2009 , 2:34am
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mm now i read back i over it...your probably right with anothe verse cause this one has used all the "lines" if ya get me.
This is so bloody hard

Maybe it could be
like a repeat of thank you balch blah blah
then the end? LOL

I have no idea!

Inspired84 Posted 14 Aug 2009 , 2:37am
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With all my love
I want to say
Thank you so much
for making my day?

lol
different word to making though?

Elise87 Posted 14 Aug 2009 , 2:47am
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no i think that sounds good just as it is! Finish's it nicely thumbs_up.gif

So....

A sincere thankyou i want to say
For your generous gift
on my baptism day

A beautiful gown
which i will hold dear
to look back on in the future
not only now and here

So with all my love
I want to say
Thank you so much
for making my day


I added the word 'so' just to make it like you know that verse is the last one? Otherwise you can take it out if it doesn't work

Otherwise jolly good!

Inspired84 Posted 14 Aug 2009 , 3:15am
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Thanks so much for for that your are the BEST!
I have decided to leave yuor gift verse in there too cause it sounds so good!
Have emailed the candle lady! when i get them i will post a photo to show what a great job you did!
again THANK YOU SO MUCH!

Elise87 Posted 14 Aug 2009 , 2:10pm
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that's alright icon_smile.gif glad we could come up with something

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